we've been practicing recounting from our past and what has happened growing up.
Planning Ideas
1.Beach House
2.Motorbike
3.Friends
4.sea
5.old
6.rock
7.shower
8.Flip
9.Fast
10.Racing.
>My success criteria<
>Hook the reader<
>Include the important for the reader<
>include details so that reader knows how we feel<
Big Blue Bruises
Zoom! my friends and I are racing down the beach like cheetahs running in fear. I looked down at my motorbike’s wheels. When I looked up I was heading straight into a giant rock. I did a flip in the air the next minute the motorbike fell on me. When I got home I had BIG BLUE BRUISES up and down my leg. I never raced on my motorbike again. Now I never go near the rock but Now my BIG BLUE BRUISES are gone well some of them.
I have a BIGGER motorbike now it's good because it has gears and I can't go too fast. It’s 250cc, my brothers one is 150cc.We have a beach house in Porangahau that's where I crashed into the giant rock. my friends are a little older now ones 14 the other one is 10. We see each other 7 times a year but we have fun always.The crash scared me for the rest of the year. It was the worst experience of my life, except when I cut my knee open and I had to go to the hospital.
My brother is like a test dummy. Every day he gets hurt, he gets it from my dad. When he was young he had a two wheeler. He was riding it up and down the beach. We have a lot of fun and terrible memories.But my dad's was worse he cut nearly all of his face open. my mum on the other hand, she has not had any thing wrong with her nearly all of her life. I really hate ROCKS!.
Medal: Put all the information in.
Medal: To put my planning at the top of the page.
mission: Remember to put full stops in the right place.
